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索老師點題漫畫式大作文 范文點評修改
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索玉柱
2006年1月5日
于北大暢春園
五星級大作文題目
1、 人生處處是考場/考驗
◇ Face Up Challenges and Tests in Life
◇圖畫為正面命題：反映“挑戰(zhàn)、創(chuàng)新與成功”的主題。
◇ 圖示如下：一些年輕人在大道上行走，前方有高聳的大學(xué)學(xué)府、研究所的招牌，但路兩旁設(shè)有各種各樣的考場和在座的考官。
Face up Challenge and Test in life
As is vividly depicted in above picture, in order to enter our yearning college and obtain the corresponding degree, we must experience a variety of tests throughout our lives. Taking a test is challenge and opportunity in the meantime. To succeed in our lives, we must face up test proactively.
In the first place, we should establish solid foundation during school times. [此處為倒裝句] Only when we equip ourselves with the most basic scientific knowledge will we have the chance to get touch with and grasp the high and new technology. Secondly, we must open our mind and have the spirit of innovation. Innovation is critical to not only one person's development but also to a country's development. To behave excellently in a test, innovation is the highlight. At last, we should apply our knowledge correctly. Without a positive value point, knowledge is valueless and even can be harmful.
All in all, now that test is not avoidable, we only can find the best solution to pass it. And I think that test is the most effective means of encouraging us learning hard and continuously. So why not say thanks to the test? [14--15分索玉柱評分]
2、 放棄同樣需要勇氣 （此題最重要）
◇ Giving Up Is Also Needed Courageously.
◇圖畫為正面命題：反映“自身修養(yǎng)，與環(huán)境共同發(fā)展”的主題。
◇ 圖示如下：一個人放下了一個大斧頭，不再砍那一顆長滿果實的大樹。圖畫的含義和寓意是：人類需要與自然環(huán)境同步發(fā)展，科學(xué)把握自然規(guī)律，不能盲目冒進(jìn)，為一時的利益所左右自己。
Giving Up Is Also Needed Courageously[修改稿]
In the picture, a person is putting down an axe slowly, because he doesn’t want to cut down a big tree with many ripe fruits. Before this fat benefit, the man can give up his idea of cutting down the fruit tree. This action is really worthy of courage; that is, “Giving up also needs courage.”
It is much clearer that the drawer attaches importance to development, whose implication, I believe, can be summarized in the following two aspects. In the first place, in this world, too many people take it for granted that we can freely take anything we need from environment. But if we couldn’t stop excessive development, the earth would become nothing, including water shortage and air pollution [得分點： 虛擬語氣]. In the second place, in such a competitive information age, natural resources are always limited. We have to change our minds in order to obey natural laws and regulations. In terms of protecting our earth,[口訣：擴(kuò)展?fàn)钫Z] giving up today just means taking more tomorrow.
The earlier we begin to protect our earth, the more likely we can obtain from the earth. In the future, the earth will have fresh air, clean water and bright sun-shines again. What we can do is to implement our slogan “please protect our own world because we have only one” .
3、 錯過機(jī)遇等于失敗。
◇ Losing Chance Breeds Total Failure.
◇ 圖畫為反面命題：反映“學(xué)科學(xué)、用科學(xué)，在實踐中在把握機(jī)遇”的主題。寫作中需要在結(jié)論中正面弘揚(yáng)拼搏精神、科學(xué)的發(fā)展觀。
◇ 圖示如下：一個男子背著獵槍，拿著指南針在定位東南西北的方向，尋找獵物，但一只野兔就在他的身旁。這樣的對比關(guān)系含有這樣的寓意：人人身旁都會有機(jī)遇，要擅長把握它們。不要好高務(wù)遠(yuǎn)，應(yīng)該腳踏實地從實際出發(fā)，科學(xué)合理地辦好每一件生活和工作中的小事。
Losing Chance Breeds Total Failure
As is shown from the graph, we can see clearly that losing chance leads to entire failure. A hunter is holding a compass, looking for a rabbit everywhere. But the rabbit is just around him. He fails to find it because he always aims at large and far-away goals and is reluctant to look around him. So it is pity that the chance fails him again and again.
As it is，chance is waiting for a man who has a ready mind. A man may be ambitious and want to succeed very much, but he is idle and always does nothing all day long. So when chance comes, he can’t hold it. He is doomed to failure. On the contrary, if a man has been studying or working hard for his ambition, he may have chances to achieve. That is why a diligent man has more chances to succeed than an idle man. That is, we should make a concrete plan for our goal. This plan may include many procedures and we should take measures to attain the aim at present. Therefore, we are able to achieve our ambition step by step. At the same time, chances come nearly to you naturally.
In conclusion, only if we are ready for success, chances are always around ourselves.
4． 謙讓他人同樣也方便自己
◇ Modesty Is Also Beneficial to Yourself
◇ 圖畫為正面命題：反映“人與人和諧關(guān)系，構(gòu)建和諧社會”的主題。
◇ 圖示如下：馬路上行人之間相互讓路的情景�！澳茸�。對不走，勞駕�！边@樣的禮貌語言的蔚然成風(fēng)。
Modesty is Also Beneficial to You
We can see clearly from the drawing that the persons are making/ giving way to [讓路] each other on the narrow road. To each other, they may say, “Excuse me.” “ By the way.” “ After you.”[您先走]” [務(wù)必將圖畫中的漢語提示語寫在第一段；如漢語提示語太多則寫出主要內(nèi)容，這樣的語句才為描寫句。近年來，考研作文是個描寫文+議論文的混合體，這是事實。] Undoubtedly, the cute phenomenon mirrors the build-up of social mood of harmony and modesty. The idea of the picture is this: modesty is also beneficial to you. As life needs interpersonal modesty, so does a society and even the globe, I dare say.
In the present world, we can see that varied polite behaviors around us. Internationally, China cut off the land a little to Russia, and thus they give our country more benefits. In the social affairs, the parts of China West are not quarreled with the parts of China East in the economic development, and later the developing east areas now return to give a hand to the west areas for their economic promotion. In our life time, an enterprise of product foods offers their production to a firm that product machine to the food enterprise. That is to say, modest to others that you can acquire another advantages.[評語： 句型和結(jié)構(gòu)層次很好，但事例China cut off the land a little to Russia最好改一下。]
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